Yikes!
I'm always up for a new Sonic story, but the recent animefication overcomplicated the story enough. When I was trying to read your text, I found myself struggling to read it, digest it and read the next bit. It's a tad too quick.
Also found it a bit hard to tell what you drew and what was (dodgilly) photoshopped in.
Nice work for now, but try and be a bit more original (and less confusing) next time. @_@;;
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